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Some people prefer to spend their holidays in resorts where everything is organized for them and they take little interest in the country they are visiting. Others prefer to travel around the country and to see how the people live, to get to know their customs and traditions and cuisine. What do you think is best for both the tourists and local community?

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Many
people
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 think that travelling is better when you spend a considerable amount of
money
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 on a tour plan or fancy hotels.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 argue that it is better to spend holidays interacting with local
communities
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.
This
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 essay will explain why
tourists
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 have a better experience when travelling around the
country
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 and present the economic benefits to local
communities
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.
Firstly
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, when
tourists
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 travel around the
country
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, they interact more with the natives from the region. It offers a better experience related to the culture and food in the local area.
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,
people
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 who traveled to the beautiful
country
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 of Colombia but spent their time in a boring hotel would miss a lot regarding the culture and history of the
country
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.
On the contrary
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, if they interact with locals, their experience would be more vibrant and memories related to the trip will
last
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 longer.
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, if
tourists
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 spend
money
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 with local
communities
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instead
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 of fancy hotels, they are helping those
people
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 to improve their economies. Hotels already have a strong position and always try to monopolize the market.
For instance
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, local
communities
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 in Peru, need to receive more
money
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 so that, they can offer better services to
tourists
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. If you spend more
money
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 with locals, you will receive better benefits. In conclusion, many
people
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 think that when they spend holidays in a hotel, they will enjoy themselves more.
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, if
people
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 change their minds and explore the local
communities
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, they will learn more about spectacular native cultures and will
also
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 help those
people
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 to improve their economic growth.
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