Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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unpaid community service is a
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of the discussion in a lot of
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be on a permanent basis. In my opinion, it is better to combine approaches – using payment and
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nonpayment
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of the pupils.
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charity and other, useful
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school
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schedule can help students to commit to
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the study process.
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to participate because of teenagers
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the combination of paid and unpaid can solve
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a wage for the work it
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to keep productivity for a
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small
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amount of money let to increase the self-esteem of a teenager and support
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to take
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in social work. I think
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the unpaid
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will be compensated by the paid
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student
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that they got many for the date
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week for improving a
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, even
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need to participate in a charity.
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into account
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of people in
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high
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and the role of money in
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I think, unpaid community service could be a compulsory
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of high
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programmers
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. And more and more schools implement
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approach in my country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid community service
  • compulsory part
  • high school programs
  • sense of duty
  • social responsibility
  • essential life skills
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • leadership
  • work experience
  • employable
  • community improvement
  • local community
  • time management
  • empathy
  • compassionate attitude
  • diversion from academics
  • critics argue
  • varying quality
  • inconsistency
  • students’ experiences
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