Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and theirto the countryside do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays there is a serious issue in
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society related to high traffic and a lack of places for living for people, and there is an opinion that large companies and factories should be removed to the countryside. I suppose that it is a good idea that can solve the problem that was mentioned before. It is a
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fact that high traffic occurs
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and evenings
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when people go to
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work
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their private or common vehicles. The more workplaces locate inside a city, the bigger
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, if a destination point is outside the city it won't need to use city roads. As for housing issues, cities have a limited area to build new houses, and it is more convenient to live in
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when people's work
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outside the cities.
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, moving large companies and factories to the countryside would be influenced positively to traffic and housing problems
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