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You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask your landlord if you can pay your rent late. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter explain: • Why you cannot pay the rent • When you will pay the rent. • How you will ensure you can pay your rent in the future

#landlord #rent #future
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to you to enquire about obtaining
the
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 loan to finance my business. My plan
based
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 on cooking national samsa. That samsa
including
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 elite meat and a lot of kinds of vegetables with nutrition.
Firstly
, I would to know what kind of documents I need to get credit for
new
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 business. I had practised in
areas
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 of cooking. And
finally
, when I become
senior
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 I decided to build my own restaurant. After some
calculations
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 I decided to borrow from your bank 1 million dollars. It will be the largest restaurant in our small city.
Also
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 it must
to
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do my restaurant famous in a little bit of time. In my
opinion
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 It
help
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 me refund the bank loan
during
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mouths
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months
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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