the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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information on the distribution of weekly family income among key 8 areas in one country over a 50-year period of time. In 1968 and 2018, the largest portion was spent on food and leisure respectively. The least expenditure had not changed over
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time which is fuel and power. The money spent on household goods remained
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for these 2 years. The amount spent on leisure
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doubled over the 50-year period time
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the clothing and footwear expenditure had reduced in half. In 1968, the portions of income spent on housing and clothing and footwear were
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but in 2018, the housing expense had almost doubled
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even though
the clothing and footwear amount had reduced significantly.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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