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The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with the sentence?

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Dear Liveo, I hope you are in radiant
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 and in the best of spirits. I know you have been considering getting a smart speaker, so I wanted to let you know that I have bought a Google Home speaker.
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 going on. Anyway, I love the gadget so far. I sync it with my Spotify account and Amazon prime. Nowadays, I am doing tons of
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 alarms , timers , getting reminders, asking questions, and so on. It works naturally with the voice and
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 not found any trouble
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 my voice command. It is
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 bit expensive if you buy a regular
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 but there are lots of cheaper versions
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 Home speaker. If you want I can find you an alternative
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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