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Fewer and fewer young people are interested in working as a teacher. What do you think are the reasons? What can be done to solve this problem?

More and more young
people
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 are not interested in the
job
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 of a
teacher
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. I believe that
this
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 is
due to
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 the rising
cost
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 of living and the poor
welfare
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 of the
teacher
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 profession.The government could effectively
address
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. The first reason why young
people
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 are not interested in
the
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teachers
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'
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job
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jobs
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 is the rising
cost
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 of living.
This
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 means that many young
people
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 need to pay their own loans and living expenses.
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, tuition loan is a huge expense, so young
people
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 will choose a
higher paying
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higher-paying
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job
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 to deal with the rising
cost
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 of living. Another cause is that the
welfare
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 of
teachers
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 is not satisfactory. Young
people
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 can choose
more
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apply
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careers with far better
welfare
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 than
teachers
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. Examples include Internet-related jobs, like Google, where a large percentage of employees get paid several times more than
teachers
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. It is only logical to choose a
higher paying
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job
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 to make a more comfortable life for yourself. It is undeniable that fewer and fewer young
people
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 are interested in the
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teacher
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teaching
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 profession is unhealthy for both the individual and society, so measures should be taken to encourage and help young
people
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 to engage in the
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teacher
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teaching
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job
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.
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, the government can reduce or waive the tuition fees of students who want to become
teachers
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 through financial subsidies.
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, the government can
also
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 improve the
welfare
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 of
teachers
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,
such
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 as increasing their salaries, reducing the taxes they have to pay, increasing their pensions, etc. In conclusion, the rising
cost
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 of living and the poor
welfare
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 of
teachers
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have
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 led to fewer young
people
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 choosing to work as
teachers
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. I believe that the measures mentioned above could effectively reverse
this
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 situation.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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