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Fewer and fewer young people are interested in working as a teacher. What do you think are the reasons? What can be done to solve this problem?

#people #teacher
More and more young
people
 are not interested in the
job
 of a
teacher
. I believe that
this
 is
due to
 the rising
cost
 of living and the poor
welfare
 of the
teacher
 profession.The government could effectively
address
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. The first reason why young
people
 are not interested in
the
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teachers
'
job
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 is the rising
cost
 of living.
This
 means that many young
people
 need to pay their own loans and living expenses.
For example
, tuition loan is a huge expense, so young
people
 will choose a
higher paying
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job
 to deal with the rising
cost
 of living. Another cause is that the
welfare
 of
teachers
 is not satisfactory. Young
people
 can choose
more
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careers with far better
welfare
 than
teachers
. Examples include Internet-related jobs, like Google, where a large percentage of employees get paid several times more than
teachers
. It is only logical to choose a
higher paying
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job
 to make a more comfortable life for yourself. It is undeniable that fewer and fewer young
people
 are interested in the
teacher
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 profession is unhealthy for both the individual and society, so measures should be taken to encourage and help young
people
 to engage in the
teacher
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teaching
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job
.
Firstly
, the government can reduce or waive the tuition fees of students who want to become
teachers
 through financial subsidies.
In addition
, the government can
also
 improve the
welfare
 of
teachers
,
such
 as increasing their salaries, reducing the taxes they have to pay, increasing their pensions, etc. In conclusion, the rising
cost
 of living and the poor
welfare
 of
teachers
have
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 led to fewer young
people
 choosing to work as
teachers
. I believe that the measures mentioned above could effectively reverse
this
 situation.
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