The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The bar graph illustrates how much money the country gained from exporting
goodsin five segments,
whereasthe table depicts the proportion change in values, both charts show information between 2015 and 2016.
it is clear thatthe largest export earning is petroleum
whilethe least is textiles.
However, the percentage of gems and jewellery had a decreasing
in contrast, others had a went up
trend. In terms of monetary
value, the largest export category was petroleum
products, with a
valueof more than 60 dollar billion, followed by engineered
goodsat around 57 dollar billion from 2015 to 2016.
Althoughin 2015, the rate of export earnings in petroleum
productsand textiles were smaller values than in the year 2016, in terms of gems and jewellery witnessed much more
valuethan other types of
productswhich differed at around 3 dollar billion. The proportion change in values from 2015 to 2016, the highest amount of
valueis textiles which
is15.24% and the least is agricultural
Change the verb form
Correct subject-verb agreement
althoughgems and jewellery had a declining
trend(5.18%), other terms of
productshad an increasing
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