The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The Pictures below illustrate the process of recycling the
aluminium
cans
First of all, after the usage of cans
by humans, the cans
are thrown into the trash bin containing only aluminium
cans
. Subsequently
, the trash cans
are emptied into trucks for the collection of cans
for further
processing.
afterwards the collection, the cans
are transferred to the cleaning,shredding,sorting and compressing industry for the next procedure. later on, the aluminium
material is melted in the melting industry for further
process of rolling the material and manufacturing aluminium
cans
ranging in thickness from 2.5 mm to 6.5 mm.
the material then
is used to make cans
and then
the same cans
are used to refill the drinks the people drink.Submitted by anishakumarileemani on
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