The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The Pictures below illustrate the process of recycling the
aluminium
cans
First of all, after the usage of
cans
by humans, the
cans
are thrown into the trash bin containing only
aluminium
cans
.
Subsequently
, the trash
cans
are emptied into trucks for the collection of
cans
for
further
processing. afterwards the collection, the
cans
are transferred to the cleaning,shredding,sorting and compressing industry for the next procedure. later on, the
aluminium
material is melted in the melting industry for
further
process of rolling the material and manufacturing
aluminium
cans
ranging in thickness from 2.5 mm to 6.5 mm. the material
then
is used to make
cans
and
then
the same
cans
are used to refill the drinks the people drink.
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