The pie charts on the left illustrate the proportion of three electricity-generating sources in the German and French markets in 2009 while the charts on the right further detail the composition of the segment of renewable energy in that same year.

The pie charts on the left illustrate the proportion of three electricity-generating sources in the German and French markets in 2009 while the charts on the right further detail the composition of the segment of renewable energy in that same year.
The pie charts on the left illustrate the proportion of three
electricity
-generating sources in the German and French markets in 2009
while
the charts on the right
further
detail the composition of the segment of renewable energy in that same year.
Overall
, despite the total
electricity
generation in both countries not differing dramatically, some striking discrepancies can be noted. Germany produced almost six times as much conventional thermal
electricity
than
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France.
Conversely
, the French generated approximately triple the percentage of
electricity
through nuclear power plants compared to the Germans. When zooming in on the share of renewable energies,
further
noteworthy differences can be seen. With 39.3%, the largest segment of the German market in sustainable energy sources originated from biomass,
while
only 8.1% of
the
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French
electricity
production is based on that source. Wind power makes up 36.9% of the renewables in Germany,
whereas
this
type of
electricity
accounts for only 10.5%
in
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its French counterpart. In France,
on the other hand
, hydroelectric power dominates the renewable
electricity
market, standing at a share of 80.5%. At 17.7%,
this
segment contributes far less to the field of sustainable
electricity
in Germany.
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