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Which of the following do you think is the best way to stay in good health? - Participating in group sports - Learning how to cook healthy meals - Joining a gym and following a strict exercise routine

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Staying fit is
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 of the predominant goals we can see in
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 present generation. With the advent of many fast-food stalls, the ability to maintain a rich lifestyle has diminished.
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, it is very necessary to understand the most crucial solution for
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. Some people may argue that involving in social sports and exercises can enrich a fit
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, but some rather think
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. From my perspective, I believe that gathering
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 about healthy dishes and edibles can definitely improve
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 to lead a harmonious
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. I strongly feel
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 way for the following reasons, which I shall delve into in the passage below.
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 with, enacting and studying more about different healthy cuisine styles will help
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 to acquire a sea of
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 about the various components of nutrients, both harmful and beneficial.
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, unlocking
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knowledge
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 will help us not only to live longer but
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 enable us to incorporate good eating habits.
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, I recently came to realise that eating avocado
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 to an increase in body fat tremendously. But,
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, eating
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 kind of food provides a myriad of benefits for those who work out a lot, as it is nourished with protein. So learning about
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, totally paid off as I was able to understand the best of both worlds.
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, advocating to learn to cook healthy meals will not only benefit us but
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 helps us to spread awareness to our colleagues, partners, and friends. Sharing
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 with the unknown is
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 of the best things a person can do. Talking from the same example above mentioned, my friend was trying to lose weight for two years. When asked about his diet, he mentioned hogging avocados after every workout, which immediately triggered me and enabled me to share my experience.
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 attributes received from advocating a healthy lifestyle will definitely strengthen our society.
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, not saying that practising in group sports and going to gyms will provide a healthy
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, but more than that beginning the initial step of learning the basics can be received from learning to cook healthy meals.
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, I realised from my experience that
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in order to lead a healthy
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one
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 has to start the process by learning the basics
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 as what food can be nutrient rich.

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