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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities ,which are played alone .To what exteny do you agree or disagree .

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Team activities are
overall
 more fun and indulge a person to do things they are anxious about doing alone, they are able to discuss and bring new ideas to the table, and help out with their social
skills
,
,
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 most people prefer working in groups than on their own ,especially with school projects and jobs, it
also
 assists within learning competitive
skills
.
For example
, mainly most sports are team-based, and you will need a
group
 of people to play with.
Furthermore
 , leadership and building relationship
skills
 could
also
 be built by working together in a
group
.It helps in becoming sympathetic towards others players because each player is entitled to share everything with the other player.
As a result
, everyone subconsciously feels the responsibility towards each other .
For instance
, a
group
 of college students working on a project will enhance their verbal and non-verbal communication styles. People tend to follow the law of order. On the other side, a person who works or plays in solo activities develops a sense of competitiveness, but
at the end
 of the
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 We cannot forget individual gains more
skills
 in
group
 work and those
skills
 can be applied to our daily life. In conclusion, more and more
skills
 can be discovered by performing in a team,
nevertheless
,
skills
such
 as a sense of competition
also
 could be developed through solo activities.
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