Some people believe that young people know about international pop and movie stars but know very less about famous people from the history in their own country. Why is this? How can more interest be created in young people to gain more knowledge about their own famous people from history?

It is undeniable that modern
people
know about public figures from
music
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or film industries. Unfortunately, they are not likely to recognize famous
people
in their history.
This
essay will discuss the causes of
this
phenomenon and I will explain a solution for
this
.
To begin
with, there are several reasons why many international stars are easily introduced to the young. First and foremost, most famous
people
are always on the mass media, ranging from
block-buster
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movies, pop music shows, and live performances. Undoubtedly, they are known by teenagers worldwide. In Thailand,
For example
, Talor Swift has been
regared
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regarded
as one the best singers by Thai audiences,
that is
to say, why international media are so influential to
fanclubs
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fan clubs
thoughout
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throughout
the globe. Another
reasons
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is that most famous individuals in the past are not
relavant
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relevant
to modern
people
any longer, which leads to less recognizable awareness
to
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among
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today's teenagers. To resolve
this
issue, certain activities should be held to promote the value of the late
well-know
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people
. In my hometown,
for instance
, a 'King Narai festival' is held
on
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February annually, which provides a
myraid
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myriad
of activities to emphasize the
importances
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and achievements of the late king.
Besides
, participants are asked to wear traditional clothes,
therefore
, it turns out that
this
event is meaningful and memorable for everyone. In
this
way, it helps the youngsters remember what the king had accomplished for the country over the
last
centuries. In conclusion, it
is believe
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that most teenagers know less about their prominent
persons
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people
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in the past. It might
because
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they find those
people
are not related to them, so they only recognise international stars. To tackle
this
issue, some events can help
people
commemorate
their
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important public figures who were
skillful
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in the past.
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