The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph below demonstrates the millions of
visitors
visitng
Correct your spelling
visiting
a certain Caribbean island
during
Change preposition
between
show examples
2010 and 2017.
Firstly
, it can be
shonw
Correct your spelling
shown
that the
visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
show examples
staying on cruise
ships
increased gradually from 2012 to 2017 , next ,the
visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
show examples
staying on
isalnd
Correct your spelling
island
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
slightly changed
between
Change preposition
from
show examples
2011 to 2017. And the total number of
toursits
Correct your spelling
tourists
keep growing
since
Change preposition
from
show examples
2010 to 2017.
Secondly
, the figure shows that it had a significantly
variety
Add an article
the variety
show examples
between the
visitors
staying on cruise
ships
and the
visitors
staying on
isalnd
Correct your spelling
island
from 2012 to 2014, we can see that these two had
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
1
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
visitors
of differences in 2013. But the total
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
show examples
reached
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
3.5
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
visitors
in 2017.
Lastly
, after 2016, the
visitors
staying on cruise
ships
started to exceed the
visitors
staying on
isalnd
Correct your spelling
island
.
Moreover
,in 2017, the
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
show examples
of
visitors
staying in
curise
Correct your spelling
cruise
ships
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
reached
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the highest peak in
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
7 years.
Submitted by yiinn317 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, ships with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
What to do next:
Look at other essays: