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In spite of many advances, women have made in education and employment, they continue to be at a disadvantage when it comes to pay and promotion. In your view, what should be done to promote equality of opportunity for men and women in the workplace.

#spite #advances #women #education #employment #promotion #equality #opportunity #men #workplace
The development of technology in the future will be able to make people can read everything online without paying
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newspaper
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. I totally agree with the statement and there
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 some points from my view. The main reason is technology can make anything possible, we know that currently every sector starting to change the old tools to
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 newest one which is more
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. Everyone understand
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 community habit was changing, they need
everthing
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everything
 easiest for them than before so the government, the
enterpreuneur
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entrepreneur
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, and the investor should know
this
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, in the old days we should
bought
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a food
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our self
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ourselves
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 but today we can
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app
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 like
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gojek, grab, etc. to
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 food and the driver will
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 the food for us in the restaurant.
In
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 the other hand, we should take attention
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global
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 warming issue. We know that our earth is not the same again, it is because we are consuming too much from
earth
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 like a tree, water, etc. I think it will be better if we
are publish
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newspaper
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newspapers
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book
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 online because it can reduce
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 of tree
consumtion
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consumption
for
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paper based
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. The other good
things
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 that we can achieve is we can read
newpaper
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newspaper
 or
book
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everwhere
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 and we don't need to take lots of effort to do that. In
conclution
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conclusion
, we will
be have
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 a good impact if we can
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the
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technology like a newspaper or
book
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First,
we can change our
habit
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 and make everything more easiest for us and we can help our earth to
recovery
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.
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