“Higher salaries are better than other incentives for motivating workers.” To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Looking at the task below, it's evident the way in which different opinions, concern "incentive", may turn up, giving the opportunity to think and explain a personal idea, after having made a comparison and clear sentence where is relevant.
To begin
with, the factor that every single situation, experience or perception, is experienced differently by each person; before giving a personal opinion, one needs to take into consideration several factors.
Firstly
, it's important to say that
money
has always been one of the highest incentives in the world, yet as we know everything is going around with that, and here's why a high percentage of people align themselves with the power of
money
. One clear example can be, when at work, we get motivated by higher salaries,
instead
of career growth, because for someone, following material things, is obviously easier than giving importance for what are the values of our
life
, and it is Duo to
this
reason why at the working place we found people without creativity because for them don't really matter what means found a motivation every day, what's is relevant
Instead
is having
money
every month. In, comparison some others completely avoid the importance of
money
and carry on what makes them happy and feel proud of themselves.
For instance
, they live their work
life
completely differently from the persons of the first case, because, self-motivated is, of ,course the main thing in their
life
. In my opinion, and thinking about my personal experiences, I can absolutely disagree with those who are alienated by
money
and forgive what can really improve ourselves and get better in
life
at work.
To sum up
, with what has already been stated and compared, it's important to highlight the importance of What I'm calling" being happy without having anything"which means (in
this
case), finding a motivation inside of us, without attributing our happiness to material things.
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