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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information on the amount earned per week
of
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by
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 different
age
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 groups (21-60
years
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) The earnings are expressed in
pounds
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.
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, the graph expresses a substantial increase corresponding to the
age
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 of those employed. The most significant growth in earnings can be seen in the middle-aged group (36-40) with a plummet in graduates of other types of degrees. In fact, workers with other degrees suffer a considerable decline in earnings by the
age
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 of 56-60
years
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. Generally speaking, employees who graduated
a
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with a
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higher degree earn significantly more than those with
the
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a
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 first degree, with a slight growth of just over 700
pounds
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 to 45
years
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, followed by an unnoticeable decline by 51
years
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, which passes to a high point of just bellow 800
pounds
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 of old-aged employees.
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, employees with a first degree witness an unsubstantial fluctuation,
as a result
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 of the gradual climb from approximately 350
pounds
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 at an adult
age
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 to a high point of just under 700

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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