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You live in a small city. A local internet service provider is planning to launch 5G technology in your area. Company is conducting a survey to know public opinion. Write an email to the person in charge and your email should do the following things Option A: Company should launch 5G for better communication Service. Option B: Introduction of 5G means more expensive internet services.

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Dear Sir/Ma,
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 I see the expenses and cost implications emanating from the introduction of 5G internet services, I believe the introduction of the
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 is an added advantage to our community because it leads to
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better advertisement, revenue and employment in our society.
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, the advertising industry is in dyeing need of an uplift.
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 has resulted in the industry making a declaration through its association, with several appeals to the government to invest in the sector, as the
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 investment was done in 2005. An example of the benefits the 5G
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 will bring is a faster transmission of adverts to billboards and fast streaming of content online. More so, with the improved speed of ,connection there will be a need for more employees to manage the process, thereby leading to the employment of more staff which leads to payment of tax.
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, in the country India in the year 2014, there was an introduction of a 5G
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 that led to an increase in revenue of 4% to the government.
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, I believe the advantages of the faster 5G
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 will help to develop and improve our society. In conclusion, I want to thank you for giving me the chance to share my point of view. Best regards Olayonu
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