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Traffic congestion is a major problem in most large cities ,nowadays. What are the causes of traffic congestion in cities? what could the government do to reduce this problem?

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These days, traffic congestion is the most common issue faced in many larger
cities
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. Some reasons are the increased number of privately owned
cars
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 and poor
road
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 infrastructures. To combat the government should improve
road
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 transportation and provide competitive salaries in rural areas. The growth of privately owned vehicles and poor
road
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 infrastructure contributed to
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 and traffic problems. Because of the influx of
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 from rural communities to main
cities
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 for work, many purchased
cars
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 to save time and inconvenience in commuting.
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 poor
infrastructures
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, main roads are now easily damaged, and more and more
road
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 potholes and pavements
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 though roads are newly constructed in Iligan city,
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, even though fixing and repairing are done yearly.
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,
cars
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 are piling on highways and narrowing the areas drivers can use.
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, city governance should focus on enhancing their services by building fast trains and adding more buses and stations that
people
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 can access conveniently. The government should make local transportation accessible and convenient and provide a competitive salary in rural areas.
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, taxing
cars
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 that use city expressways, main roads, and highways.
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, promoting local community businesses and opening them for investors allows more job opportunities and increased compensation. Doing
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, declines
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's interest in relocating to bigger
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 and limits the commuter time waiting. In Japan, the waiting time is less than five minutes for the next train to arrive. In conclusion, traffic congestion in big
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 decreases if issues are properly addressed it needs a joint effort from the government and its
people
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.
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 issue will continue if
people
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 will not cooperate and change.

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