The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the proportion of the
population
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in 5 cities around the world in 3 separate years.
Overall
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,
although
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there are rising trends in all areas, significant changes occurred in Bombay and Jakarta.
According to
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the graph, there is a gradual increase in the number of people living in Tokyo, New York and Shanghai.
For example
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, New York and Shanghai experienced a slight increase in 1990
whereas
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the
population
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of the latter skyrocket to over 20 in 2010.
Furthermore
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, Tokyo remained to have the largest
population
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for 40 years and it reached its highest point with 28 in 2010. Regarding the
population
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in Bombay and Jakarta, their increase is more dramatic than the other 3 cities mentioned above.
Although
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the former had only 5 in 1970, its
population
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became double in 20 years. Indeed, it had 5 times more
population
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in 2010 than it used to have in 1970, making it the second most populated area among the 5 areas being compared. Jakarta had the lowest
population
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in 1970 with only 3.
However
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, it expanded greatly in 2010 when its
population
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reached its peak of 19.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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