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I have faced a lot of ambiguity in life.

Although

, sometimes my ambiguous situation was not up to the mark, the majority of the time I coped with

this

situation.

However

, I want to tell you about my important situation when I fight with Vagueness and it regards

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my carrier.After my ,graduation I have two paths to build a carrier.

Firstly

, To go for the family business and change the path which I have studied for 4 years (Dairy Science and

Food

Technology).

Secondly

, I To grab more knowledge regarding the

food

sector and afterwards start up my own business relevant to the

food

industry.

Finally

, I choose to go abroad to enhance my knowledge towards the

food

industry.When I am able to understand all the concepts of the

food

industry

then

I definitely make my own startup in the future related to the

food

business.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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some people think that children should be encouraged to play outdoor games that require physical activities instead of playing computer games at home. Do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In todays world, people spend a lot of money on appearance because they want to look younger. Why does this happen? Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugat, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

NOWADAYS MORE AND MORE YOUNG PEOPLE HOLD THE IMPORTANT POSITIONS IN THE GOVERNMENT.SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT IT IS A GOOD THING, WHILE OTHERS ARGUE THAT IT IS NOT SUITABLE. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION