The graph below gives information from Annual Energy Outlook 2008 about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030

The graph below gives information from Annual Energy Outlook 2008 about consumption of 

energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030
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The graph illustrates data from Annual
Energy
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Outlook 2008 on
energy
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generation in the USA over a 51-year period from 1980 to 2030.
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, oil and petrol contributed
majority
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the majority
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of the
energy
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consumption and it will
rose
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over the period,
whereas
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the least amount was used in
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hydropower
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the hydropower
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sector, which will remain stable until 2030.
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, 35 quadrillion petrol and oil were used in 1980. There were some slight fluctuations until 2005 and after
that
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it rose remarkably and will hit the peak point in 2030 and the number is expected to be 48 quadrillions.
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, natural gas and coal started at 20 and 16 quadrillions respectively. Almost some proportion of
energy
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was used from 1985 to 2015.
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using of coal is forecasted to increase, natural gas generation will remain stable.
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, the uses of nuclear, solar and
hydropower
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started at
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the nearly
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same
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amount. Nuclear production increased slightly and is expected to remain unchanged,
while
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solar and
hydropower
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experienced some fluctuations.
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solar
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increased and will have the same production but
hydropower
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will dwindle
at the end
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of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, hydropower with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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