The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

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The pie charts illustrate the retail online

sales

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in New Zealand from 2003 to 2013.

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, there are gradual changes in the four products sold, and it is not only an upward trend but

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a downward trend. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that in 2003, the travel sector sold the product at 36%, and it was highest than the other items.

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, the selling showed a gradual decrease of 7% in 2013. The opposite trend showed by film/music, it was only selling at 21% at the first of the period, but the

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increased moderately by almost 50% in the next decade. In the Books items, their

sales

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accounted for 19% selling in 2003, and they were a slight rise to 22% in 2012. It was different compared with clothes in which they're selling their product almost one-fourth at the beginning period, but the

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dropped slightly approximately 16% in the

last

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period.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Comparative analysis
E-commerce
Retail sectors
Growth rate
Decade
Decline
Trends
Online transactions
Consumer behavior
Market share
Significant increase/decrease
Digital era
Accessibility
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The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

In many countries there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, a pencil, or a brush. What are the reasons for this? Is the decline in writing by hand a positive or negative development?

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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages ?

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some say that these are the best people to talk to school students about the dangers of committing a crime? Do you agree or disagree?