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The government investments in art ,music and theatre is a waste of money . Government should invest these funds in public services instead . What extent do you agree or disagree .

#government #investments #art #music #theatre #waste #money #funds #services
As stated, earning a master’s in “Food
system
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” seems the best possible step to reach my goal. I am keen to work in the development of better innovative methodological practices and machinery which would reduce the cost of production and turn
food
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the food
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 sector into a lucrative
as well as
 sustainable. I am applying to
University
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the University
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of hoheniem
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hoheniem
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hominem
 for various reasons.
Firstly
,
this
 programme offer’s me the subjects in which I want to acquire in-depth knowledge and
secondly
 the skills to work with eminent scientists and researchers.
Lastly
, the infrastructure and facilities that foster
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 learning ability at the campus.
Finally
, I would like to reiterate that I’m looking forward to being a part of the university which has a glorious history and futuristic vision ahead.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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