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The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world

The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world
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The line graph gives data about the number of users of 5 different services of communication worldwide from 1998 to 2008.
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,cell phone and Internet services become more and more popular ,and the others
similary
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similarly
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experinced
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experienced
experience
 minimal growth over the years. In 19998, the figures for all phone and Internet
user
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 started at around 5 per 100 inhabitants. They both increased over the remaining years, with cell phone service gaining the higher position in 2008,at more than 60 users per 100
in habitants
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inhabitants
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.
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 number was approximately three times as much as that of Internet service in
the
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some
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same
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 year. Meanwhile,throughout
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10 year
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 period,little change was seen
it
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in
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 the use of landline service, with about 15
user
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users
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 per 100 inhabitants.
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,mobile and fixed broadband had yet to be introduced by 2002 . The figures for these two services rose slightly to roughly 5 users per 100 inhabitants in the
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 year

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication services
  • overall trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • traditional vs. modern
  • technological advancements
  • regional disparities
  • adoption and usage
  • future predictions
  • sociopolitical events
  • altering usage patterns
  • detailed analysis
  • popularity
  • emphasize
  • demonstrate
  • surpass
  • overshadow
  • implications
  • innovation
  • transition
  • dominance
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