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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002
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The given bar chart displays how many billions of
minutes
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 were spent in the UK on telephone calls either on a local fixed line, national and international fixed line, or from mobile phones, from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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, it can be seen that calling from local fixed
lines
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 was always the most popular form of doing it. It can be
also
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 seen that both using national and international fixed
lines
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 or local
lines
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 grew from 1995 The use of local
lines
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 grew from just over 70 billion
minutes
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 in 1995 to 90
billions
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billion
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 in 1999 until a fall of 20 billion
minutes
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. Meanwhile,
minutes
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 spent on national and international fixed
lines
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 experienced a steady increase throughout the 7 years long time period, and those
minutes
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 used on mobile phones gained an impressive increase, starting from almost not being even used to a steady growth that led to almost 50
billions
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billion
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 of
minutes
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 on calling in 2002.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, lines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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