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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .
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The diagram provides data that compare the percentage of families’ income that they spent in one week in 1968 and in 2018,
as well as
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, what did they use that
money
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 for.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that in the past, people mostly spent their
money
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 on food;
however
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,
when
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as
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 time passed, they were likely to manage most of it between food, housing, transport and leisure. A closer look at the bar chart reveals that in 1968, the population gave most of
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the priority
 to
the
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apply
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food with 35% of their salaries ;
moreover
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, for
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,
such
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 as fuel and power, clothing and footwear and household goods to name but a few, only got about 5-10% of the
money
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 that
were
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 gained.
On the other hand
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, the crowd that lived in 2018 mostly divided their weekly income equally;
in addition
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, most of the
money
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 was shared between cuisine, residence, transport and hobby about 10-25% each,
furthermore
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 the rest of it was divided in smaller proportions with lower than 10% for each aspect.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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