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Information from a tourist office in the United Kingdom between January and June

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 from a tourist office which has given information in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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, two out of three ways experience a gradual increase,
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 another one decreased moderately. In January, wishing information by
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 starts at about 900
requests
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, whilst in person and by
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/
email
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 stood at above 400 and under 800
requests
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 respectively. In the next month, by
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 fell slightly to 800 calls, and
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 trend is shown by
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 and
email
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 approximately 700 applications.
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, in-person reveals a slight rose at 600
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. In March,
telephone
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 shows a different trend which is a slight increase at 1000 calls, and in-person experiences the same trend too at 800
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. Yet by
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/
email
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 has remained stable at 700
requests
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.
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, for the end of the period, in-person and by
telephone
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 increased significantly to about 1900 and 1600
requests
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 respectively, albeit by
letter
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/
email
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 showed a slight fall under 400
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