You bought a game DVD and it is defective. Write a letter to the store for returning this DVD. In your letter • introduce yourself • describe what went wrong • say what you want from the store manager

Dear Sir or
madam
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, I am writing to complain about a game
DVD
which was bought from your store
last
Sunday. I would like to return it back because it is not working correctly.
Firstly
, I would like to describe myself. My name is Milav Soni from Sector No 2A, Gandhinagar.
Last
Sunday, I and my cousin were come to your store for purchasing the Spiderman game
DVD
. You had given me
latest
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Spiderman
DVD
from your store.
Secondly
, I would like to describe an incident
what
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we
were suffer
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while
we insert
DVD
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the DVD
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in
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into
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Gamebooks Unit first time. As we inserted
into
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it into
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the
DVD
panel, we heard some noisy
sound
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from it. Again, we inserted it and heard the same sound. After that, I look up at
DVD
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the DVD
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and saw that it is cracked from
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the center
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center
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.
Therefore
, we thought it was available from starting. We were so nervous at that time.
Finally
, I request you please replace it with
newer
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a newer
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one and send it to my home address. I have sent it
along with
this
letter. I hope next time you will give me
correct
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DVD
. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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you would look
this
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matter immediately. I am waiting for your letter. Yours sincerely, Milav Soni
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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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