You bought a game DVD and it is defective. Write a letter to the store for returning this DVD. In your letter • introduce yourself • describe what went wrong • say what you want from the store manager

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Dear Sir or

madam

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Madam

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, I am writing to complain about a game

DVD

which was bought from your store

last

Sunday. I would like to return it back because it is not working correctly.

Firstly

, I would like to describe myself. My name is Milav Soni from Sector No 2A, Gandhinagar.

Last

Sunday, I and my cousin were come to your store for purchasing the Spiderman game

DVD

. You had given me

latest

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the latest

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Spiderman

DVD

from your store.

Secondly

, I would like to describe an incident

what

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that

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were suffer

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while

we insert

DVD

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the DVD

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into

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Gamebooks Unit first time. As we inserted

into

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it into

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the

DVD

panel, we heard some noisy

sound

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sounds

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from it. Again, we inserted it and heard the same sound. After that, I look up at

DVD

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the DVD

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and saw that it is cracked from

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the center

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center

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Therefore

, we thought it was available from starting. We were so nervous at that time.

Finally

, I request you please replace it with

newer

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a newer

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one and send it to my home address. I have sent it

along with

this

letter. I hope next time you will give me

correct

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the correct

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DVD

. I would appreciate

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it if

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you would look

this

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matter immediately. I am waiting for your letter. Yours sincerely, Milav Soni

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

207 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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