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The plans below show a science park in 2008 and the same science park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps provide information about the display of the
Science
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park
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 and changes that have been in 2008 years and nowadays.
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, it can be seen from the given view that
Science
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Park
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 used to have a fresher climate than today and, in the meantime,
people
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 who own bikes would not be able to enjoy
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park
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,
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 residents of
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 area can enjoy many different new buildings today. In 2008 years the
Science
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Park
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 used
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have a huge distance of grassland with several trees in it which, gave an opportunity to enjoy
people
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 fresh weather who work buildings
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 as an office, a reception and a car
park
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 located near it.
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, there was not any availability for
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 who
with
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cycle in the
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 the
people
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 who have a skill in computer programming could attend here to deal with their businesses. Concerning the current view of the
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Park
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 the biggest change is the construction of the research and development buildings with the University hub below the office.
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 there is build the cycle path with the new bus station across the
park
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 and the car
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 is slightly reduced than before.
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 of an IT centre
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 we can see an innovation centre just in front of cyber security which extended much today.
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, the rail station is in the same position as it was.

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