The graph below illustrates the number of Canadian university graduates for both genders from 1992 to 2007.

The graph below illustrates the number of Canadian university graduates for both genders from 1992 to 2007.
The Line graph provides information about the
number
of male and female university
graduates
, in Canada, between the years 1992 and 2007. In general, the visual indicates that the numbers of
graduates
for both genders increased significantly by end of the period, with females being in the lead throughout the period. To start with, by end of the academic year 1991 / 1992, the
number
of female
graduates
was nearly 98000, in comparison, the male
number
was substantially lower, just over 70000.
However
, both genders' numbers rose noticeably in the following academic years, by 1994/1995, the
number
of female graduate's
number
reached 105000, and for males 78000 approximately. From
then
onwards, there was a moderate decline before both trends started to rise sharply, and
finally
, end of the academic year 2006/2007 the female
number
went up steeply to approximately 148000,
likewise
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the male
number
of
graduates
increased to nearly 98000.
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