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Some parents think that childcare centre's provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better to care for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a matter of great concern for working
parents
 who will take
care
 of their beloved kids when they are at
workplace
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. Some
parents
 feel that daycare centre supply better
care
while
 others think that close relatives are the best choice to look after
children
.
This
 essay will discuss both points of view and argue that family
members
 are
a
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preferable carers for youngsters, followed by a reasoned conclusion. Many
parents
 leave their
children
to
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at
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daycarecare
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daycare care
 centres for the time they stay at
work
 maybe because lacking
a
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trustable family
members
 or they think that
care
 service providers are qualified, they will take
care
children
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of children
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 the better way in all aspects,
for instance
,- they will take the vital role to intake
children
 proper nutrition, they will inspire
children
 to play meaningful games. Above is the reason why many working
parents
 keep their kids in
a childcare centres
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childcare centres
a childcare centre
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. Keeping
children
 with family
members
such
 as grandparents, and sibling is the most reliable option for working
parents
.
This
 is because of trust issues, as
parents
 feel their child will be safer with someone from within the family
members
. As an illustration,
Personally
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 I am an example of keeping my
children
 with my
parents
. I feel less concerned about my son when I am at the office as I know my mother brings up my son the same way they did me.
This
 is clear evidence that
parents
 feel much more peaceful at
work
 if their youngster is taken
care
 of by the nearest family member. In conclusion,- During working hours
parents
 stay unsettled and can't concentrate on
work
 if they feel their kids are not taken
care
properly
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 . Some
parents
 feel prefer to keep their
children
 in childcare
whereas
 others like to bring up
children
 by a family person
while
 they are at
work
. In my opinion,
Parents
 should keep
children
 with close family
person
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people
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 as they do take
care
 better than daycare
care
 centres.
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