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The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table compares the proportion of local
government
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 spending on health care in five countries and the percentage of their workforce aged 24 to 30 in the medical service in 2006.
It is clear that
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 of all five countries, the Italian
government
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 spent the largest
share
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 of money on health care,
while
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 the Polish
government
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 invested the smallest
share
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.
However
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, more than half of the 24-30-year-olds from Poland worked in health-related fields, ranking first. In terms of
government
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 spending, the Italian
government
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 spent the largest
share
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 of money on healthcare, with a figure of 27%,
whereas
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 Poland's
share
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 was only 5%. The numbers for Finland, Iceland and Spain were relatively close, at 9%, 11% and 13% respectively. Looking at the young workforce in
this
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 area, a stark contrast could be seen in Poland. 54% of 24-30-year-olds work in medical service, even though
government
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 spending was relatively minimal. Italy, in second place,
also
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 had 40% of young people working in
this
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 section. Finland, Iceland and Spain had between a quarter and a third of youth working in
this
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 area as well.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words government, share with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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