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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1
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The table displays people consume calories in several different foods in several particular countries. It can
also
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 represent the different choices
on
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of
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 main
food
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 in different places. It can be seen that Cambodians take rice as their main
food
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,
and
Correct word choice
apply
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people
live
Wrong verb form
living
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 in Poland and Egypt eats Wheat mainly, and
Mexican
Correct article usage
the Mexican
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 main
food
Use synonyms
 is Maize.
This
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 phenomenon points out the development of culture and the evolution of geography and history.
Although
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 Poland and Egypt are quite far from each other, the climate of these two places is both likely dry, which is good for the growth of wheat.
This
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 may be the reason for their similarity in
food
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 tradition.
Otherwise
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, Cambodia is located in Asia, where rice is constantly planted and is taken as
main
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the main
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food
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 since ancient times. Mexico is located in the middle of
American
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the American
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 mainland, where maize is
as well as
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 heavily planted as
main
Correct article usage
the main
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food
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. Mexico even
use
Change the verb form
uses
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 maize as fuel
crops
Fix the agreement mistake
crop
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.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • staples
  • dietary preferences
  • agricultural output
  • nutritional intake
  • per capita
  • predominant
  • subsistence crops
  • culinary habits
  • food security
  • statistical overview
  • consumption patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • domestic production
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