You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The picture shows the process of olive oil production. The process includes the following stages.
1. A worker
pickes
Correct your spelling
picks
picked
olives
from trees amd
put them Correct your spelling
and
to
bowls.
2. The picked Change preposition
in
olives
are washed Change preposition
in at
at
Correct your spelling
a
special
Correct article usage
a special
machine
by
cold water. Change preposition
with
This
operation distinguishes also
bad
collected pieces Change the word
badly
such
as tree's
sheets, small Change noun form
tree
dirts
and so on.
3. Change the wording
dirt
specks of dirt
Then
the belt conveyer transports the olives
to the smash
Change the verb form
smashing
machine
. The machine
design includes rotary
Add an article
the rotary
a rotary
part
with Fix the agreement mistake
parts
special
Add an article
the special
a special
disc
. The disc moves around the rotation axis and smashes the Fix the agreement mistake
discs
olives
out. The process gives olive paste
and olive stones.
4. Workers put the bottles with olive paste
to
special bags with holes and deliver them to the press.
5. Pressing of Change preposition
into
olive
Add an article
the olive
paste
.
6. The pressed pieces are brought to the separaing
Correct your spelling
separating
machine
. The machine
separates the pressed pieces of olive paste
onto oil and water.
7. The oil is delivered to storage and furthur
to shops.Correct your spelling
further
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words olives, machine, paste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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