You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The picture shows the process of olive oil production. The process includes the following stages. 1. A worker
pickes
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picks
picked
olives
from trees
amd
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and
put them
to
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in
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bowls. 2. The picked
olives
are washed
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in at
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at
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a
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special
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a special
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machine
by
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with
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cold water.
This
operation distinguishes
also
bad
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badly
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collected pieces
such
as
tree's
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tree
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sheets, small
dirts
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dirt
specks of dirt
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and so on. 3.
Then
the belt conveyer transports the
olives
to the
smash
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smashing
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machine
. The
machine
design includes
rotary
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the rotary
a rotary
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part
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parts
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with
special
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the special
a special
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disc
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discs
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. The disc moves around the rotation axis and smashes the
olives
out. The process gives olive
paste
and olive stones. 4. Workers put the bottles with olive
paste
to
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into
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special bags with holes and deliver them to the press. 5. Pressing of
olive
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the olive
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paste
. 6. The pressed pieces are brought to the
separaing
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separating
machine
. The
machine
separates the pressed pieces of olive
paste
onto oil and water. 7. The oil is delivered to storage and
furthur
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further
to shops.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words olives, machine, paste with synonyms.
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