The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture shows the process of olive oil production. The process includes the following stages.
1. A worker
pickes
Correct your spelling
picks
picked
olives
from trees Use synonyms
amd
put them Correct your spelling
and
to
bowls.
2. The picked Change preposition
in
olives
are washed Use synonyms
Change preposition
in at
at
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a
special
Correct article usage
a special
machine
Use synonyms
by
cold water. Change preposition
with
This
operation distinguishes Linking Words
also
Linking Words
bad
collected pieces Change the word
badly
such
as Linking Words
tree's
sheets, small Change noun form
tree
dirts
and so on.
3. Change the wording
dirt
specks of dirt
Then
the belt conveyer transports the Linking Words
olives
to the Use synonyms
smash
Change the verb form
smashing
machine
. The Use synonyms
machine
design includes Use synonyms
rotary
Add an article
the rotary
a rotary
part
with Fix the agreement mistake
parts
special
Add an article
the special
a special
disc
. The disc moves around the rotation axis and smashes the Fix the agreement mistake
discs
olives
out. The process gives olive Use synonyms
paste
and olive stones.
4. Workers put the bottles with olive Use synonyms
paste
Use synonyms
to
special bags with holes and deliver them to the press.
5. Pressing of Change preposition
into
olive
Add an article
the olive
paste
.
6. The pressed pieces are brought to the Use synonyms
separaing
Correct your spelling
separating
machine
. The Use synonyms
machine
separates the pressed pieces of olive Use synonyms
paste
onto oil and water.
7. The oil is delivered to storage and Use synonyms
furthur
to shops.Correct your spelling
further
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