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The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage that adults who
work
 spend on different activities in a country in 1958 and 2008. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that most workers in 1958 and 2008 spend their
time
 working,
while
less
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fewer
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 people spend
time
in
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travelling to
work
 during 1958 and 2008. First of all, the highest percentage in 1958 was working, reaching exactly 33%. After that, 32% of the individuals spend their day sleeping which was significantly higher than going out with friends and family by approximately 12%.
According to
 the least three percentages, they were relaxing at home, other interests or playing sports and travelling to
work
 as they stood at 8%, 6% and 2%, respectively. By far, 42% of humans tend to
work
 during their day in 2008.
On the other hand
, spending
time
 sleeping reached 25%.
Then
, 13% of the working individuals, which was an average ratio, spend their
time
 relaxing at home. Surprisingly, the percentage of
time
 spent per day doing other interests or playing sports and travelling to
work
 had the same number which was 8%.
Last
 but not least, 6% of the
time
 was spent
in
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going out with friends and family.
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