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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #space #exploration #waste #governments #benefit #nation
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I strongly agree with the idea of spending
money
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 on
things
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 that help our
nation
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 to benefit from it usage in the future. Nowadays, a lot of companies spend their
money
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 on
space
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 exploration
as well as
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 inventing new machines to explore the
space
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. In the first hand, some
people
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 think that spending too much
money
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 on
space
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 exploration is a waste of time and
money
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, but there are others who have the passion on exploring new
things
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, so they don't mind about wasting
money
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 on looking for new
things
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 about the
space
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.
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,
government
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 has a big role on these decisions, they can easily decide to spend
money
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 on some useful
things
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 to our
nation
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.
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: to help improve our society by building new metros and trains for new transportation to reduce crowded places
instead
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 of exploring the
space
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 and wasting a lot of effort. In the other hand, the
government
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 should spend
money
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 on building new hospitals and charities.
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, to help minimize poverty in our
nation
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, the
government
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 can help poor
people
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.
Such
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 as: by building refuges for these
people
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 and help them to be a part of expanding our
nation
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 by spending
money
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 on better
things
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.
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, the
government
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 is responsible about where to spend
money
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. In conclusion, there is a wide variety of
people
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 with different opinions about where the
government
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 should be spending
money
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 whether for
space
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 work or on some beneficial
things
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 for the country to help it be more flourished in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • complete waste
  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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