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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in future, such as those related to science and technology.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
In
this
 modern era, self choices of
subjects
 became more controversial among
the
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students
 some people believed that pupils have
right
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the right
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 to
study
 those
subjects
 in which they
interested
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.
While
 other
group
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 of people argue that readers should
study
 topics that will
useful
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 in future
such
 as
science
 and
technology
. I agree with both
view
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 and discussion my opinion in
upcoming
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 paragraph To commence with, agreement points
of
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notion
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the notion
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 that
students
 should
given
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a
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 freedom to learn
subjects
 in which they are interested. I will elucidate the reason
firstly
, he
show
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 interest in the class and activities related to
subject
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the subject
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.and achieve good marks.
Secondly
,
students
fell
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 comfortable and mentally fresh
while
 reading
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the subject
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subject
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subjects
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 and always participate in
subjects related
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 activities.
On the other hand
, those who argue
students
 should
study
science
 and
technology
subjects
. Needled to say that it is undeniable fact importance of
technology
 and
science
 constantly rising up and will be more in demand in future. To epitome, when in
pdemic
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pandemic
 whole world faced very dangerous disease and its antibiotics prepared in
lab
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 by a scientific.
As well as
science
 helps to
made
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 medicines and other antibodies that save human lives.
Furthermore
, nowadays
young
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 generation
are
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 interested in IT. They make new apps and use
it
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 as
source
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a source
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 of
earning
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.
Technology
 makes human life easier and
provide
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huge
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 opportunity to earn money. In my opinion, if scholars read
theme
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 which they like the most gives them
mentally
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 satisfaction and they read it without the fear of
fail
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. To recapitulate, parents should give
proper
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the proper
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 right to individuals to
study
subject
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subjects
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according to
 their choice
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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