Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in future, such as those related to science and technology.

In
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subjects
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some people believed that pupils have
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to
study
those
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.
While
other
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of people argue that readers should
study
topics that will
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in future
such
as
science
and
technology
. I agree with both
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and discussion my opinion in
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paragraph To commence with, agreement points
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that
students
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freedom to learn
subjects
in which they are interested. I will elucidate the reason
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, he
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interest in the class and activities related to
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.and achieve good marks.
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,
students
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comfortable and mentally fresh
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subject
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and always participate in
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activities.
On the other hand
, those who argue
students
should
study
science
and
technology
subjects
. Needled to say that it is undeniable fact importance of
technology
and
science
constantly rising up and will be more in demand in future. To epitome, when in
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pandemic
whole world faced very dangerous disease and its antibiotics prepared in
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by a scientific.
As well as
science
helps to
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medicines and other antibodies that save human lives.
Furthermore
, nowadays
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generation
are
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interested in IT. They make new apps and use
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as
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of
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.
Technology
makes human life easier and
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huge
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opportunity to earn money. In my opinion, if scholars read
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which they like the most gives them
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satisfaction and they read it without the fear of
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. To recapitulate, parents should give
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right to individuals to
study
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according to
their choice
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  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
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  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
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