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in some countries, people prefer to rent a house to live in, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house. does renting a housr have more advantages or disadvantages than buying a house?

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In numerous nations having a personal residence of one's own is a privilege to those without. It may be for countless reasons, but the most significant ones are economic problems.
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 essay is on to count some of them with a focus on the issued economy.
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 with, inflation in developing countries is appalling, at least in some of them,
as a result
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 of devaluing the currency, the rental rate grows rapidly even exceeding the minimum or average wages. In
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 a devastating situation, citizens in capital cities are more at
stake
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 of being destitute, So the majority of the society to survive proceed to purchase homes.
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, the huge demand for a roof appreciates its value per see.
On the other hand
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, being a landlord
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 the desired residency
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 as personalized decoration brings about great fortune for people,
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 the value of properties.
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, a part of the population has the chance to buy cheap and sell dear,
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 the others get into trouble more and more. In
this
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 situation, buying a home is considered an investment, not doing any economical activities, landlords benefit from their assets.
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 it is not negative as
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, but
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 causes a deeper distinction between wealthy and poor or even middle-class people in a paralyzed economy. Having said some features of the issue, I am of the opinion that when the mentioned subject turns to a crisis, like what was mentioned above, could be not only negative but frustrating.
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 taking up the business of structure and urban planning is a profitable career all around the world, changing to an urgent, not just an option, to the majority of society, would be a threat to other parts of society.
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