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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world.

#development #tourism #english #language #world #people
It is thought
by
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some people that
English
 has
been become
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 widely the only international
language
 those people speak around the world. Having
one
 speech like
English
 which is much easier than other languages, there are many benefits
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although
,
coming
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 the drawbacks are noticeable. As we know,
English
 has just been chosen
an
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 international
language
 for decades by the authorities and the vast majority of visitors have to speak
English
 when they travel abroad for better communication with others. To thrive rapidly
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fluent
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speak
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one
 sound is
one
 of the most crucial features
than
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 understanding two or more languages.
In addition
, the increasing industry of tourism and the spread of economic systems when will be created strongly that a useful word
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 connect communication between them. Another reason that must be considered is, most people are not able to learn perfectly and perceive two or more languages, so concentrating on
one
 will be caused the growth of fluency and learning more vocabulary.
On the other hand
, having
one
language
 is a serious threat,
due to
 it is possible the basis of
English
 will be changing dramatically or to will be in danger of extinction in the future.
For example
, the invasion of a foreign army to the UK can affect badly on the prose and culture and
also
 the word order might be disturbed. In conclusion, I believe speaking
one
 global
language
 has many plus points than its disadvantages so, it is better to improve
language
 skills in a specific field and not need to be concerned about what happened in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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