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The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018

The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018
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The provided graph has shown the weekly payment of families on different objects.
This
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 chart covers a span between 1968 and 2018. as per
this
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 chart , there are 8 different
expenditure
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expenditures
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 as food , housing , household goods , personal goods , transport ,
leisure
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 ,
fuel
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 and
power
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 , clothing and
footware
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footwear
.
Overall
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, after an analysis of
this
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 line graph, it can be observed that food was the highest
percentages
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percentage
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,
whereas
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fuel
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 and
power
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 were the lowest percentages in 1968. In 2018, personal goods
was
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were
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 the least
proportions
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proportion
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in contrast
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 to
leisure
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 which was the most percentage. In the beginning, housing , clothing and
footware
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footwear
 were similar (10%).
In addition
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, transport and
leisure
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 were nearly the same hit (8.5%) , (7.8%)
consequently
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 in 1968 .
However
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, food ,
fuel
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 and
power
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 were completely different registered (35%),(6%) in order. Later on,
leisure
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 and housing are nearer and it recorded around (23%),(19%)
subsequently
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.
Moreover
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,
leisure
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were
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was
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 the highest percentage (23%)
in contrast
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 to
fuel
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 and
power
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 were scored approximately (3%) in 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leisure, fuel, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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