The graph below shows the results of a survey on the percentage of people who drank soft drinks every day over 7 day period in 2019 in the 4 countries of the United Kingdom.

The graph below shows the results of a survey on the percentage of people who drank soft drinks every day over 7 day period in 2019 in the 4 countries of the United Kingdom.
The table provides information about the percentage rate of
people
in four states in the UK who drank carbonated drinks daily, the study is done over 1 week period in the year 2019.
Overall
, among all carbonated beverages,
Coca-cola
is the top choice in three countries (England, Wales, and Northern Ireland),
whereas
,
Irn-Bru
is in Scotland.
Abeit
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Albeit
, the highest number of
people
who consumed in total are the Scottish
while
the
people
in Northern Ireland were the lowest. In England, a total of 40% of the correspondents drank soft drinks which places third on the rank which
coca-cola
accounted for the highest with 16%, followed by
pepsi
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,
fanta
,
sprite
, and
Irn-Bru
at 8%,7%,5%, and 4% respectively. In Scotland,
however
,
although
this
country has the highest percentage who drank soft drinks with 51%,
this
is the only country that preferred
Irn-Bru
(23%) to
coca-cola
(11%), where
pepsi
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,
fanta
and
sprite
at 7%,6%, and 4% sequentially. Meanwhile, Wales is the second most carbonated drinker with 45%. From
this
country where the most numbered correspondents choose coca- cola with 20%. Trailed behind
pepsi
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(8%),
fanta
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(5%) and
Sprite
and
Irn-Bru
both with 6%. Northern Ireland,
on the other hand
, is the
last
in place with 39% of the total. 18% of its
people
drank
coca-cola
, far behind;
sprite
at 7%,
pepsi
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at 5%,
fanta
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Fanta
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%,
Irn-Bru
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and Irn-Bru
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at 3% which is the lowest.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coca-cola, irn-bru, pepsi, fanta, sprite with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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