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A growing number of people rely on restaurants and convenience food (Frozen food and packaged meals) rather than home-cooked food to supply most of their meals. What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating this way ?

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These days , more and more
people
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 prefer dining out or ready-to-go
food
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 over cooking at home
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most of the
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.
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 essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of
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 phenomenon. On one hand, regarding the advantage of having meals in restaurants and prepared
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, the most significant one is that they are very convenient.
People
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, especially those living in the city, live a hectic life and they are busy with their work. As most of them have long working hours and short rest
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, they would like to eat something
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 well prepared by the others in order to reduce the
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 that they spend on meal preparation,and
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, able to have more
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 for rest and other leisure activities.
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,
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 cooking is a life essential skill, not many
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 know how to cook well, especially the young generation. In order to have a taste of different cuisines and delicious dishes, they would like to dine out as in generally prepared
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 taste good.
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, relying on restaurants and convenience
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 may affect
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's health as they could not control the ingredients used in the
food
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. In order to make
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 more attractive and tasty, chefs and
food
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 manufacturers would add a large
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 of
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 additives, sugar and sodium into the meals and they are very unhealthy. Eating a lot of these kinds of
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 may have a high risk of several diseases including obesity, diabetes, high blood pressure and even cardiovascular disease.
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,if
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 prepare the meal by themselves, they could control their use of ingredients and prepare healthier
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. In conclusion,
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 eating ready-prepared
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 is more convenient and could help us save
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, it may bring detrimental effects on
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's health,
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,
people
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 should strike a balance between dining out and home cooking.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience food
  • processed food
  • nutritional value
  • high-calorie
  • sodium content
  • dietary needs
  • budget constraints
  • culinary skills
  • health implications
  • time management
  • professional chefs
  • meal preparation
  • varied cuisine
  • unhealthy fats
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