The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of academic
staff
with different genders among variation
of majors in 2012. X-axis represents different faculties of departments, Y-axis reveals percentages of academic Fix the agreement mistake
variations
staff
according
their gender. There were Add the preposition
toaccording
totally
7 different majors available for academic Replace the word
total
staff
in 2012.
Overall
, most
male dominant major was Engineering approximately %82, Add an article
the most
a most
nevertheless
the second major gender gap between male and female academic staff
related with
Education major.
The most gender-equal faculty was Medicine, Change preposition
to
therefore
the gap between staff
was less than %5.
According to
Arts and Education majors, female university personals were significantly higher as %75 and %55 respectively. Business, Law and Science departments relatively
similar to each other the gap between gender was around %20 and males represented to higher population. The least percentage Add a missing verb
are relatively
holded
by female Correct your spelling
held
personals
Replace the word
personnel
of
Change preposition
in
Engineering
Department. It is true that Correct article usage
the Engineering
Faculty
of Medicine contained slightly higher percentages of female university Correct article usage
the Faculty
staff
in 2012 around %52.Submitted by historicalpen on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words staff with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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