The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members  across the faculties of a major university in 2012

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of academic
staff
with different genders among
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of majors in 2012. X-axis represents different faculties of departments, Y-axis reveals percentages of academic
staff
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their gender. There were
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7 different majors available for academic
staff
in 2012.
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,
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male dominant major was Engineering approximately %82,
nevertheless
the second major gender gap between male and female academic
staff
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Education major. The most gender-equal faculty was Medicine,
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the gap between
staff
was less than %5.
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Arts and Education majors, female university personals were significantly higher as %75 and %55 respectively. Business, Law and Science departments
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similar to each other the gap between gender was around %20 and males represented to higher population. The least percentage
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by female
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Engineering
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the Engineering
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Department. It is true that
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of Medicine contained slightly higher percentages of female university
staff
in 2012 around %52.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words staff with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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