The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The result of a survey about crucial exercise goals and locations of a focused group of adults between 20 and 50 years old was depicted.
Overall
, the result was divided into three main parts: Process of care, quality impacts, and foundations. These 3 parts function as a cycle and each of them impacted one another. Strated as the foundations that was divided into 5 sub criterias: population, governance, platforms, workforce, and tools. The opinions toward these criterias received from those interviewers various differently. In the population sector pointed out that people has health needs and expectations to exceed.
While
governance
also
need to provide health related insurance and efficient policy. Platforms,
on the other hand
, need to improve their accessibility and organisation. The number of workforce requires higher skill people and better supports.
Lastly
,
according to
tools, better equipments and medicines are needed. By improving those foundations, process of care will develop. The improvement will not only fulfill the system but
also
provide pleasant user experiences.
Thus
, from a bigger perspective,
this
will have a quality impact on various sectors
such
as better health for citizen, reliable system and positive consequences on the economic sector.
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