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Traffic congestion is becoming increasingly problematic in major cities. What solutions can you suggest to help the problem?

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Reports show that heavy traffic is going to be a significant issue in megacities. In my opinion, with the assumption of the contribution of government and
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, there are many ways to address
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 problem. In
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, developing public transportation and reducing the fare encourages
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 to
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 these vehicles for their daily journeys.
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, when
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 realize that using public transportation is efficient both in time and money, they absolutely decide not to drive to work and
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 other vehicles for their inward urban travels.
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, the government should stimulate
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 to
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 bicycles for their short journeys by building more and more dedicated roads for bicycles alongside every street. In fact, it is commonly accepted that using bicycles is both healthy and cost-effective, so preparing routes and making more facilities for bike runners make
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 them more and more
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 of their cars.
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 but not least is to increase the cost of using motor-equipped vehicles.
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, increasing taxes on using personal automobiles during rush hours or raising the petrol price can prohibit
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 from using them.
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 traffic congestion is an inevitable part of living in modern cities these days, the government can control it by expanding public transportation, making more bike facilities, and charging citizens who
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 their cars for short journeys.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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