If we want to save the future of the planet, we will have to dramatically change our way of life. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, our

planet

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needs our help. So, we must change our lifestyle. In

this

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essay, I will explain how we change our lifestyle. Let's commence by looking at the first course and its solution. I think it is factories and personal car's polluted

air

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this

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polluted

air

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is too harmful to our

planet

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and the atmosphere. If we

will

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not prevent it on time our earth can die, and polluted

air

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lead

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leads

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to the earthʼs Azan layer breaking. Its solution is we must restrict our personal cars and

factoryʼs'

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numbers. It can lead to helping our earth.

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method is very effective.

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, our world-developed countries use

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method, and their natural resource and the

air

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is like a new, and too fresh Let's start by looking at the second reason and its solution. I think it is we must restrict visits to other planets and we must protect our natural resources.

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, our natural wealth organises for our

planet

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. If we protect our natural wealth, our

planet

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will never die. Nowadays plenty of developed countries

uses

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rackets and space ship for going for research from space. These rackets and space

areships

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airships

ships

useful

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are useful

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for people.

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, those things are harmful to our

planet

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. Nowadays our

planet

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needs

peopleʼs

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help.

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, if we would love to protect our

planet

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, we must restrict personal cars and factoryʼs numbers.

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government

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demands that things, our earth will not die. In my view, now we live in

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place and we are responsible for our

planet

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coherence cohesion

It is essential to include an introduction and conclusion in the essay to provide a clear framework for the discussion and to summarize the main points.

task response

The essay addresses the task prompt but lacks detail and development in the discussion. It would benefit from providing more specific examples and elaborating on the ideas further.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

255 words

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If we want to save the future of the planet, we will have to dramatically change our way of life. What is your opinion?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In some places old age is valued, while in other ultures youth is considered more important.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many countries, people like to eat a wider variety of food than can be grown in their local area. As a result, much of the food people eat today has to come from other regions. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.