The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

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comparisons where relevant. The president line graph illustrates us about four different categorized jobs of the

economy

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in the USA in two time periods, units measured in millions. From an

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perspective,

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healthcare and the retail economies experienced

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increase

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without decrease until the end of the

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manufacturing

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the manufacturing

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shows us slightly grew from 15 to 20

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in double decades, and from 1980 to 2020 experienced

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and

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measures of jobs reached around 13

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Agriculture

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economy

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started the

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with 5.5

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trend decreased in 1980, and until 2020 remained steady measures, approximately 3

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. Retail and healthcare economies started the

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trends

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stabilized until

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2020, and

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their units stayed

same

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measures, around 15

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retail

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the retail

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economy

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started with 5

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, and agriculture began

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Complete response

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167 words

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The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

In the past, people lived in one place for a long time , but now they can live in many different places what are the reasons ? Is this positive or negative development ?

In some school and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (e.g. literature) and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this trend need to be changed?

Despite a large number of gyms, a sedentary lifestyle is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this? What solutions can you suggest?

The company you work has decided to close the cafeteria as the staff is not using it much. You are not happy with the decision. Write a letter to the director. -give reason of low usage. -how will it affect the staff. -suggest ways to improve it.

Nowadays many people chose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?