The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the
percentage
of
people
who have part-time jobs in the countries that make up the United Kingdom, both in 1980 and
in
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2010.
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generally been a small increase in part-time
workers
from 1980 to 2010, except in Northern Ireland. The graph
also
shows that England and Wales have far more part-time
workers
than Northern Ireland and Scotland. In 1980, 25% of
people
in England worked
part time
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. The only country with a greater
percentage
of part-time
workers
was Wales, with around 33% working
part time
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. Both countries saw an increase in the
percentage
of
people
working
part time
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in 2010. In England, the
percentage
rose to over 30% and in Wales
percentage
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the percentage
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rose to just over 35%. Scotland had the smallest
percentage
of part-time
workers
in 1980, with just over ten per cent.
However
,
this
rose to almost 20% in 2010 which is a large increase.
Lastly
, Northern Ireland was the only country which had a decreasing
percentage
of part-time
workers
. In 1980, it had around 15% of
people
in part-time work.
This
decreased by a couple of per cent in 2010.
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