Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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in
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job
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highly-paid
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bachelor's
to
senior high school graduates.
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job
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a job
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society
. To illustrate, when they gain their Use synonyms
university
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impact
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impacts
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society
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community
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To sum up
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education
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important
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an important
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all
in
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job
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individuals
society
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